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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah  Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 11:28 am |
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subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
subah.. subahh gi kia right time per yaar poetry ya share kia hai wasay ya read ker k muj ko hayal aya hai k mare eak dost k ya kaam buath aa sacti hai lolzzzzzzzzzzzzzz. send ker don na usko hope u dont mind. baki buaht hi nice likha busy life mian pata nahi ap ksay time nikal ker ya likh lati ho mian tu likhne batay tu eak din lag jay aur phir b asa na likh pao. maza aay ga read ker k. teri kami ,teri kami wah buaht hi ala buhat se b buaht sari daat kabol kigiya..
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 11:36 am |
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mohiuddin wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
muhabbat ki dastaan ke thay mis'aali kirdaar jo
gaahay-ba-gaahay milte the jo
waqt-be-waqt mulaqaat ko taras'tay the jo
hama waqt ek dosre ki aaghosh ko taraptay thay jo
abb nae saal milain gae shaad-o-nadir jo
agle saal aur agle saal......aur usse agle saal
haal aur mustaqbil ke zamane se kahin aage nikal ke
shaid ke mazi ko pallat ke dekhain jo
yad aoge tum ,yaad aainge hum
roz ba roz ...
hafta-war
mah-ba-mah
saal-ba-saal
ya kabhi kabhi
phir sab dhundhla jaega...
tere naam ka her lafz mit jaega
harf rah jainge ,perhe bhi na jaingay
phir aek essa waqt bhi aaiga
jab aek saal essa bhi jaaiga...
naam badal jainga , jism badal jainga
ishq phir naya bhais badal ke aa jaiga
tu phir ek naya janam laikay
kisi aur jism main aa jai ga
dil terpay ga , roey ga ,pukaray ga...
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
subah.. Amazing. Splendid Astonishing Infact - Lovely..!! mohiuddin....buhat shukria.....nawazish karam mehrbani aapke qeemti waqt jo aapne dia ess nazm ko satish o tehseen ke lia...thank you loads
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 4:24 pm |
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kheyal wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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muhabbat ki dastaan ke thay mis'aali kirdaar jo
gaahay-ba-gaahay milte the jo
waqt-be-waqt mulaqaat ko taras'tay the jo
hama waqt ek dosre ki aaghosh ko taraptay thay jo
abb nae saal milain gae shaad-o-nadir jo
phir sab dhundhla jaega...
tere naam ka her lafz mit jaega
harf rah jainge ,perhe bhi na jaingay
phir aek essa waqt bhi aaiga
jab aek saal essa bhi jaaiga...
naam badal jainga , jism badal jainga
ishq phir naya bhais badal ke aa jaiga
tu phir ek naya janam laikay
kisi aur jism main aa jai ga
dil terpay ga , roey ga ,pukaray ga...
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
subah.. khoobsuret kheyalat....
mohabbet....jo hamesha..andeshon...aur san'hon ki zud men rehti hai...
lruzti...kanpti......ksi saeban....ki khahish liye.....aasman ko dekhtay howay.
ksi..mehrban..lumhay ka hath thamtay howay....
ksi na-mehrban ko awaz detay howay.
khoob hai...yeh dastan bhi.
likhti rahen....shadab rahen..kheyal buhat shukria...aapki appreciation hum ko mazeed acha likhne ka housla o justajoo aata kerti hae khush rahain subah..
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 7:32 pm |
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lonely_life1 wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
subah.. subahh gi kia right time per yaar poetry ya share kia hai wasay ya read ker k muj ko hayal aya hai k mare eak dost k ya kaam buath aa sacti hai lolzzzzzzzzzzzzzz. send ker don na usko hope u dont mind. baki buaht hi nice likha busy life mian pata nahi ap ksay time nikal ker ya likh lati ho mian tu likhne batay tu eak din lag jay aur phir b asa na likh pao. maza aay ga read ker k. teri kami ,teri kami wah buaht hi ala buhat se b buaht sari daat kabol kigiya.. buhat shukria mozam..(lonely)
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 8:18 pm |
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subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
subah.. subahh, aap ki pervaz e fikr ki kya daad dain, bohat hi achotay mazameen jazbaat se labraiz hotay hain aap k kalam main..... bohat si daad qabool kijiye....bohat khush rahiye....
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 9:47 pm |
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tabs wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
subah.. subahh, aap ki pervaz e fikr ki kya daad dain, bohat hi achotay mazameen jazbaat se labraiz hotay hain aap k kalam main..... bohat si daad qabool kijiye....bohat khush rahiye.... tabasoom aapki ahsaan-mund-o-mumnoon hon....bandi to zara-e-be-nishaan hae...aapki sataish esse aftab bana'ne pe tuli hoi hae....ger essa he to buhat buhat shukria khush rahain sdubah..
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 12:46 am |
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subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
muhabbat ki dastaan ke thay mis'aali kirdaar jo
gaahay-ba-gaahay milte the jo
waqt-be-waqt mulaqaat ko taras'tay the jo
hama waqt ek dosre ki aaghosh ko taraptay thay jo
abb nae saal milain gae shaad-o-nadir jo
agle saal aur agle saal......aur usse agle saal
haal aur mustaqbil ke zamane se kahin aage nikal ke
shaid ke mazi ko pallat ke dekhain jo
yad aoge tum ,yaad aainge hum
roz ba roz ...
hafta-war
mah-ba-mah
saal-ba-saal
ya kabhi kabhi
phir sab dhundhla jaega...
tere naam ka her lafz mit jaega
harf rah jainge ,perhe bhi na jaingay
phir aek essa waqt bhi aaiga
jab aek saal essa bhi jaaiga...
naam badal jainga , jism badal jainga
ishq phir naya bhais badal ke aa jaiga
tu phir ek naya janam laikay
kisi aur jism main aa jai ga
dil terpay ga , roey ga ,pukaray ga...
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
subah.. subahh ji buhut hi achhe.. abhi wo alfaaz nahi milte humain to k jis ko tareef karna kehte hain,,, lekin jab bhi aap k thread mai aata huun aap ki poetry se aur zyada impress ho kar jaata huun... yuunhi likhti rahiye aur buhut khuush rahiye  !i!yst
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 8:12 am |
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subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
Wahhh... Aa'la khayal!
Laikin yeh apki aik wahid naz'm hai jisko lay kar main ab bhi sooch main gum hoon... kya iss ki "inspiration" jaan sakti hoon?
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 5:23 am |
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subahh wrote: lonely_life1 wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
subah.. subahh gi kia right time per yaar poetry ya share kia hai wasay ya read ker k muj ko hayal aya hai k mare eak dost k ya kaam buath aa sacti hai lolzzzzzzzzzzzzzz. send ker don na usko hope u dont mind. baki buaht hi nice likha busy life mian pata nahi ap ksay time nikal ker ya likh lati ho mian tu likhne batay tu eak din lag jay aur phir b asa na likh pao. maza aay ga read ker k. teri kami ,teri kami wah buaht hi ala buhat se b buaht sari daat kabol kigiya.. buhat shukria mozam..(lonely) buht khoob.buht acha likhti hain  
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 7:30 am |
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*MYSTERIOUS* wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
muhabbat ki dastaan ke thay mis'aali kirdaar jo
gaahay-ba-gaahay milte the jo
waqt-be-waqt mulaqaat ko taras'tay the jo
hama waqt ek dosre ki aaghosh ko taraptay thay jo
abb nae saal milain gae shaad-o-nadir jo
agle saal aur agle saal......aur usse agle saal
haal aur mustaqbil ke zamane se kahin aage nikal ke
shaid ke mazi ko pallat ke dekhain jo
yad aoge tum ,yaad aainge hum
roz ba roz ...
hafta-war
mah-ba-mah
saal-ba-saal
ya kabhi kabhi
phir sab dhundhla jaega...
tere naam ka her lafz mit jaega
harf rah jainge ,perhe bhi na jaingay
phir aek essa waqt bhi aaiga
jab aek saal essa bhi jaaiga...
naam badal jainga , jism badal jainga
ishq phir naya bhais badal ke aa jaiga
tu phir ek naya janam laikay
kisi aur jism main aa jai ga
dil terpay ga , roey ga ,pukaray ga...
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
subah..
subahh ji buhut hi achhe alfaaz waqui nahi milte hain aap ki poetry parhney k baad k aap ko comments diye jayen...yaha aa k aap ki poetry k seher main gum ho jatey hain ...bohot khoob jee khush rahiye ...Allah bless u ...... 
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Aaya kuch is aada se k palkain bhego gaya
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 11:23 am |
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*MYSTERIOUS* wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
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imm-shabb...
naya saal hae gale milne ko
sab kuch hae tayyar,badal jane ko
sunn ,maheena, taareekh....
waqt,main aur tum
ye lamha-e-taaghi'yur hae ke lamha-e-firaq-e-yaar
muhabbat ki dastaan ke thay mis'aali kirdaar jo
gaahay-ba-gaahay milte the jo
waqt-be-waqt mulaqaat ko taras'tay the jo
hama waqt ek dosre ki aaghosh ko taraptay thay jo
abb nae saal milain gae shaad-o-nadir jo
agle saal aur agle saal......aur usse agle saal
haal aur mustaqbil ke zamane se kahin aage nikal ke
shaid ke mazi ko pallat ke dekhain jo
yad aoge tum ,yaad aainge hum
roz ba roz ...
hafta-war
mah-ba-mah
saal-ba-saal
ya kabhi kabhi
phir sab dhundhla jaega...
tere naam ka her lafz mit jaega
harf rah jainge ,perhe bhi na jaingay
phir aek essa waqt bhi aaiga
jab aek saal essa bhi jaaiga...
naam badal jainga , jism badal jainga
ishq phir naya bhais badal ke aa jaiga
tu phir ek naya janam laikay
kisi aur jism main aa jai ga
dil terpay ga , roey ga ,pukaray ga...
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
subah.. subahh ji buhut hi achhe.. abhi wo alfaaz nahi milte humain to k jis ko tareef karna kehte hain,,, lekin jab bhi aap k thread mai aata huun aap ki poetry se aur zyada impress ho kar jaata huun... yuunhi likhti rahiye aur buhut khuush rahiye !i!yst myst, buhat nawazish....shukria....mehrbanai...aap ka yahan aana....perhna...impress hona...yahi kammai hae...hamare fon ki...thanks alot for appreciation...
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 8:58 pm |
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Masooma wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
Wahhh... Aa'la khayal!
Laikin yeh apki aik wahid naz'm hai jisko lay kar main ab bhi sooch main gum hoon... kya iss ki "inspiration" jaan sakti hoon?
jab kishty doobne lagti hae to bojh ootara kerte hain
buhat shukria mere thread pe aane ka,pasundidgi ka....khush rahain.
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Tue Jan 05, 2010 5:33 am |
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Uff.............
subahh....kya jazbaat o ehsasat ka aina hai.........Subhan Allah........main ne is poetry ko feel kiya hai, main ne is tishnagi ko mehsoos kiya hai aur iski tamazat se meray atraf garmi e jazbaat ka aik allow dekha hai...........
Kya baat hai subahh ye fun aap k hi liye mukhtas hai k aap arq e jabeen ko bhi moti kardain, aah e barid ko saba kardain....aur garmi e lums ko tasavur e aghosh kardain....
Tonnes of load of appreciation to you, I am unable to spell out the exact words to my feelings......
Bohat khush rahiye, aik Shahkar takhleeq ki nazr bohat si daad qabool kijiye....
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Tue Jan 05, 2010 9:30 am |
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subahh wrote: main,meri jawani aur Sooraj
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main ,meri jawani aur sooraj
jab bhi niklay hain
zameen ko
aur zameen ke
loogon ko
faiz hi pohnchaya hae
apni hayyat bukhsh kirnon se
zameen ke sabze ko
loogon ki umangon ko
perwan charhaya he
aae chaand !!!
tou ne kabhi ek roz ko bhi
aapni chaandni udhar na dee
na mera qarz mujh ko lotaya
na tou mere sath too'lu hoa
na tou mere sath gharoob hoa
main,meri jawani aur sooraj
yon hi jalte rahe
soolagte rahe
tarapte rahe
per teri chamak-damak main
koi farq na aane dia
kisi ko dermian na aane dia
tou bhi meri
sona si kirnon ka
bheekari raha
tou bhi mere
jism ki harrarat ka
sheekari raha
main,meri jawani,aur sooraj
pur tujh pe marte rahe
pur tujh piyar kerte rahe
tujh ko bila-sood qarz dete rahe
tujhe bila-shart qurbat dete rahe
yon hi jalte rahe
sulagte rahe
tarapte rahe
pur tujh se kabhi ghafil na hoae
tou ke hamari aankhon ka noor tha
tou ke hamari raatun ka gharoor tha
tou ke hamare dil ka saroor tha
main,meri jawani aur Sooraj
bay-bus....bay-kuss.....
bina battae....
aek din.........
ACHANUK DHALL GAE
subah.. wahhhhhhhhhh achi lagi main, meri jawani aur soorj. lekin abhi aasman aur bhi hain. thanks.dad hi dad he.
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Tue Jan 05, 2010 12:11 pm |
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suabhh buaht hi nice poetry yaar Allah se duwa kerne ko dil ker raha hai k kaho k muj ko b suabhh jasa mind daain sochne ki gahrhi dain..
main,meri jawani aur Sooraj..apke shariiy main har cheez nazay ati hai hakikat , afsana, kalpana. sab kuch. keep in touch . keep more and more sharing..
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Tue Jan 05, 2010 12:48 pm |
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subahh wrote: main,meri jawani aur Sooraj
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main ,meri jawani aur sooraj
jab bhi niklay hain
zameen ko
aur zameen ke
loogon ko
faiz hi pohnchaya hae
apni hayyat bukhsh kirnon se
zameen ke sabze ko
loogon ki umangon ko
perwan charhaya he
aae chaand !!!
tou ne kabhi ek roz ko bhi
aapni chaandni udhar na dee
na mera qarz mujh ko lotaya
na tou mere sath too'lu hoa
na tou mere sath gharoob hoa
main,meri jawani aur sooraj
yon hi jalte rahe
soolagte rahe
tarapte rahe
per teri chamak-damak main
koi farq na aane dia
kisi ko dermian na aane dia
tou bhi meri
sona si kirnon ka
bheekari raha
tou bhi mere
jism ki harrarat ka
sheekari raha
main,meri jawani,aur sooraj
pur tujh pe marte rahe
pur tujh piyar kerte rahe
tujh ko bila-sood qarz dete rahe
tujhe bila-shart qurbat dete rahe
yon hi jalte rahe
sulagte rahe
tarapte rahe
pur tujh se kabhi ghafil na hoae
tou ke hamari aankhon ka noor tha
tou ke hamari raatun ka gharoor tha
tou ke hamare dil ka saroor tha
main,meri jawani aur Sooraj
bay-bus....bay-kuss.....
bina battae....
aek din.........
ACHANUK DHALL GAE
subah..
Gudd Yaar... Subha Bohet Zaberdast... Bohet Kamaal... Kia Acha Likhti Ho...
Bohet Si Daad Qabool Kijiye Meri Taraf Se...
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Tue Jan 05, 2010 11:55 pm |
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tabs wrote: Uff.............
subahh....kya jazbaat o ehsasat ka aina hai.........Subhan Allah........main ne is poetry ko feel kiya hai, main ne is tishnagi ko mehsoos kiya hai aur iski tamazat se meray atraf garmi e jazbaat ka aik allow dekha hai...........
Kya baat hai subahh ye fun aap k hi liye mukhtas hai k aap arq e jabeen ko bhi moti kardain, aah e barid ko saba kardain....aur garmi e lums ko tasavur e aghosh kardain....
Tonnes of load of appreciation to you, I am unable to spell out the exact words to my feelings......
Bohat khush rahiye, aik Shahkar takhleeq ki nazr bohat si daad qabool kijiye.... tabs, buhat shukria....main muflis hon...kashkoul khali hae....shashder hon ke kiya likhon jawab main..  ..aapne mujhe zameen se utha ke aasman pe betha dia....main aapne ko us muqaam pe unfit mehsoos kerti hon...aap ne zare ko aftab bana dia...jawabun yahi kahon gi "tareef us khuda ki jis ne jahan banaya"....jis me aap sa qaderdaan aur mujh si adna shairah bana di...thanks alot tabs...
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2010 12:07 am |
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subahh wrote: Masooma wrote: subahh wrote: imm-shabb (aaj ki shabb)
ab bhi hae jannah....haan....ab bhi hae...
teri kami ,teri kami ,teri kami...!!!
Wahhh... Aa'la khayal!
Laikin yeh apki aik wahid naz'm hai jisko lay kar main ab bhi sooch main gum hoon... kya iss ki "inspiration" jaan sakti hoon?
jab kishty doobne lagti hae to bojh ootara kerte hain
buhat shukria mere thread pe aane ka,pasundidgi ka....khush rahain.
Iss qadar tafseeli jawab kay liye shukriya Sabia. Yeh naz'm dobara parhi tou aur bhi khoobsorat lagnay lagi...
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2010 12:10 am |
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subahh wrote: main,meri jawani aur Sooraj
Wahhhhh!! Bohat he khoobsorat naz'm hai..
Emotions.. search.. desperation.. a need.. and helplessness.. main,meri jawani aur Sooraj
bay-bus....bay-kuss.....
bina battae....
aek din.........
ACHANUK DHALL GAE
Behad khoobsorat andaaz e bayan!
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2010 11:17 am |
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buhat shukria tamam sathiyon ka... khush rahain....
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2010 1:45 am |
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subahh wrote: zehar-e-judaii
Waaaaaahhh! Bohat he nazuk khayaal par naz'm likhi hai aapnay. What sensitive emotions.. spectacular imagery!!tab achanuk......
ek qatra e shabnami ansoo
sokhe hontun ko ch'ho gaya
uff !!kyun namak hae chirka
mere zaghm-khurdah dil ki
gerhrai me ootter ke.....
aae zehr-e-judai....!!!
Bohat khoob!
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2010 8:53 am |
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subahh wrote: zehar-e-judaii
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din se badan tha jala jala
shaam se dil tha bujh bujh
phir raat ki tanhai katne ko aaee
aaesay me teri yaad dil me dhere se otter aaee
kash yun hota ,kash tu sath hota
jaltarung bajte rooh raaqs kerti
khumaar badan me hole hole charhta
tera haath hota, tera laams hota,mera ahsasa hota
mere sukhae labun pe tu
shireen nami ka ahsass jagata
me ess shireen nami se
doori ki piyas bujhati
zehr e judai ka kuch to teryaaq hota
tab achanuk......
ek qatra e shabnami ansoo
sokhe hontun ko ch'ho gaya
uff !!kyun namak hae chirka
mere zaghm-khurdah dil ki
gerhrai me ootter ke.....
aae zehr-e-judai....!!!
subah Dear sabiha mind blowing osam ...Bohat hi khubsurat nazm bohat acha tarekay say ap nay lafzoon ko milaya hai bohat allla keeeeeeeeeeep sharing dear
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:19 am |
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saab g bht kamal lekha ha specially last line awesome ha aae zehar-e-judai khub
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2010 5:21 pm |
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Masooma wrote: subahh wrote: zehar-e-judaii
Waaaaaahhh! Bohat he nazuk khayaal par naz'm likhi hai aapnay. What sensitive emotions.. spectacular imagery!!tab achanuk......
ek qatra e shabnami ansoo
sokhe hontun ko ch'ho gaya
uff !!kyun namak hae chirka
mere zaghm-khurdah dil ki
gerhrai me ootter ke.....
aae zehr-e-judai....!!!
Bohat khoob!
khush rahain
subah..
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Fri Jan 08, 2010 5:00 pm |
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Wah Wah Wah hi nikli jitna waqt parhta raha,,, Nihaeti khoobsurat alfaz diye hain aapne apne khayalaat ko.. 
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Fri Jan 08, 2010 6:57 pm |
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subahh wrote: zehar-e-judaii
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din se badan tha jala jala
shaam se dil tha bujh bujh
phir raat ki tanhai katne ko aaee
aaesay me teri yaad dil me dhere se otter aaee
kash yun hota ,kash tu sath hota
jaltarung bajte rooh raaqs kerti
khumaar badan me hole hole charhta
tera haath hota, tera laams hota,mera ahsasa hota
mere sukhae labun pe tu
shireen nami ka ahsass jagata
me ess shireen nami se
doori ki piyas bujhati
zehr e judai ka kuch to teryaaq hota
tab achanuk......
ek qatra e shabnami ansoo
sokhe hontun ko ch'ho gaya
uff !!kyun namak hae chirka
mere zaghm-khurdah dil ki
gerhrai me ootter ke.....
aae zehr-e-judai....!!!
subah wah bohat umda subahh ji likhti rehye
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 09, 2010 3:54 pm |
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subahh wrote: Naya saal aur purani mohabbat,
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kissi anay walay nae saal ki dastk sono tum,
aur mujeh na pao,(tum muje dor se door-tar hota hoa daekho).
to jan lena
naya saal hamare muqader ki kitaboN pe
siyahi mal ke aya hae
na os me maiN hoN ,
na os me tum ho,
bas ek sayah raat hae,
is sayah raat me
ek benam si khalish hae,
is benam si khalish me
ik ajab kashish hae,
jo chaiN se jinay na day,
jo pal pal kuch DhonDhti phir rahi hae,
aur ose nahi pa rahi hae ,
laut kay,mayoos arahi hae,
aur ab......
najane kab se
thak ke so gai hae
subahh.. tasweer ka dosra rukh bht piyari laga, lamha-e-wasal se lamh-e-firaq bht gehra hota hai, keep writing magar main chahta hoon k mhbt k dard ki taskeen ko dunia k ehsaso main dubo kar phr likhain, duagooooooooooooooo
zonaaaaaaaaaaaaaaab
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Post subject: Re: poetry by Subah Posted: Sat Jan 09, 2010 10:27 pm |
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subahh wrote: zehar-e-judaii
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din se badan tha jala jala
shaam se dil tha bujh bujh
phir raat ki tanhai katne ko aaee
aaesay me teri yaad dil me dhere se otter aaee
kash yun hota ,kash tu sath hota
jaltarung bajte rooh raaqs kerti
khumaar badan me hole hole charhta
tera haath hota, tera laams hota,mera ahsasa hota
mere sukhae labun pe tu
shireen nami ka ahsass jagata
me ess shireen nami se
doori ki piyas bujhati
zehr e judai ka kuch to teryaaq hota
tab achanuk......
ek qatra e shabnami ansoo
sokhe hontun ko ch'ho gaya
uff !!kyun namak hae chirka
mere zaghm-khurdah dil ki
gerhrai me ootter ke.....
aae zehr-e-judai....!!!
subah buaht nice nazam subahh g kafi silent nazam hai.. asay hayal jinka tasawar kia jata hai. buaht hi khobsurat yaar..
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