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 Post subject: Re: lafzoN kii takraar vaale she'r likhiye
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تیرے محیط میں کہیں گوہرِ زندگی نہیں​
ڈھونڈ چکا میں موج موج، دیکھ چکا صدف صدف


tere muheet meiN kahiN gohar_e_zindagi nahi
dhoond chuka maiN mouj mouj, dekh chuka sadaf sadaf


aur Allama Iqbal yuuN bhii farmaate haiN...

maiN huuN sadaf to tere haath mere guhar kii aabruu
maiN huuN Khazaf to tuu mujhe gauhar-e-shaahvaar kar



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Qareen jaan kon hai? MeiN zard zard hogayi
Jawab DhooNDh DhooNDh kar, meiN gard gard hogayi : (


gaya jo waqt voh phir naheeN aataa, naheeN aataa
na paaoge, na paaoge, kahiiN dekho, kahiiN DhooNDho



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тнє ѕ๏lιтαяу wrote:
تیرے محیط میں کہیں گوہرِ زندگی نہیں​
ڈھونڈ چکا میں موج موج، دیکھ چکا صدف صدف


tere muheet meiN kahiN gohar_e_zindagi nahi
dhoond chuka maiN mouj mouj, dekh chuka sadaf sadaf


aur Allama Iqbal yuuN bhii farmaate haiN...

maiN huuN sadaf to tere haath mere guhar kii aabruu
maiN huuN Khazaf to tuu mujhe gauhar-e-shaahvaar kar

bohat he dilkash kaha... :)O



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قرین جان کون هے؟میں زرد زرد هو گئی
جواب ڈھونڈ ڈھونڈ کر, میں گرد گرد هو گئی

Qareen jaan kon hai? MeiN zard zard hogayi
Jawab DhooNDh DhooNDh kar, meiN gard gard hogayi : (

ahh... shair dilkash bohat... :)O



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ye shair mujh per hai... jo mere saath dheet bana maiN bhi us k saath dheet ho gaya... :mrgreen:

جس بات پر عزیز اڑے ہیں اڑے رہیں
کہنے دیں اُن کو اُونچے گلے سے نہیں نہیں


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چاکِ دامن تو خیر سل جاتا
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اے سحر، آج ہمیں راکھ سمجھ کر نہ اُڑا
ہم نے جل جل کے ترے راستے چمکائے ہیں


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Udhar zulfo'n mein kanghi ho rahi, kham nikalta hai,

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Udhar zulfo'n mein kanghi ho rahi, kham nikalta hai,

Idhar ruk ruk ke, khinch khinch ke hamara dam nikalta hai.


ilaahii Khair ho, uljhan pe uljhan baRhtii jaatii hai
na unka Kham nikaltaa hai, na hamaara dam nikaltaa hai


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Hum Shajar Thay Shajar Hi Rahay,

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کچھ درد پنہاں, کچھ فکر جہاں, کچھ شرم خطا, کچھ خوف سزا
اک بوجھ اٹھائے پھرتی ھوں اور بوجھ بھی کتنا بھاری ھے

kuch dard pinhaa.n , kuch fikr e jaha.n , kuch sharm o khataa , kuch khauf e sazaa
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Kuch Asay Hadsay Bhi Zindghi Main Hotay Hain..

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Kuch Asay Hadsay Bhi Zindghi Main Hotay Hain..
Kay Insan Bach To Jata HAi Magar Zinda Nahi Rehta


"Khadija" jii es sher meN koii lafzii takraar to nazar nahiiN aa rahii hai :thinking

takraar is meN kyaa hai agar kah rahaa huuN maiN
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خار بہ خار گل بہ گل فصل بہار آ گئی
فصل بہار آ گئی ، زخم بحال ہو گئے


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ہم اشکِ غم ہیں، اگر تھم رہے رہے نہ رہے
مژہ پہ آن کے ٹک جم رہے رہے نہ رہے


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ہم اشکِ غم ہیں، اگر تھم رہے رہے نہ رہے
مژہ پہ آن کے ٹک جم رہے رہے نہ رہے


hum ashk_e_gham haiN, ager tham rahe rahe na rahe
miza pe aan k tukk jamm rahe rahe na rahe


ye ashk chashmoN meN ham-dam rahe rahe na rahe
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ستا ستا کے ہمیں اشکبار کرتی ہے
تمہاری یاد بہت بیقرار کرتی ہے


sata sata k humeN ashkbaar kerti hai
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ستا ستا کے ہمیں اشکبار کرتی ہے
تمہاری یاد بہت بیقرار کرتی ہے


sata sata k humeN ashkbaar kerti hai
tumhari yaad bohat beqaraar kerti hai


haNsaa haNsaa ke shab-e-vasl ashk-baar kiyaa
tasalliyaaN mujhe de-de ke be_qaraar kiyaa


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کسی آہٹ میں آہٹ کے سوا کچھ بھی نہیں اب
کسی صورت میں صورت کے سوا کیا رہ گیا ہے


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کسی صورت میں صورت کے سوا کیا رہ گیا ہے


kisi aahatt meiN aahatt k siwa kuch bhi nahi ab
kisi soorat meiN soorat k siwa kia reh gaya hai


aziiyat thii magar lazzat bhii kuchh is ke sivaa thii
aziiyat hai aziiyat ke sivaa kyaa rah gayaa hai ?


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راہ راہ دیواریں، گام گام بے گاریں
شہرِ سنگ میں کیوں کر میں نے زندگی کی ہے


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ندگی تلخ سہی ، زہر سہی، سم ہی سہی
درد و آزار سہی، جبر سہی، غم ہی سہی
zindagi talkh sahi, zehr sahi, sim he sahi
dard o aazaar sahi, jabr sahi, ghum sahi

lafz sim hai ya sam, ya sum hai pata nahi : (


ye lafz "sam" hai jis ka matlab bhii zahr hii hotaa hai...lekin mujhe lagtaa hai yahaaN lafz "sam" nahiiN balki "sitam" honaa chaahiye..kuoN ki zahr ka istemaal pahle hii ho chukaa hai to shaair phir se "sam" ka istemaal kyoN karegaa aur vo bhii "Sahir" jaisa shaair...aap ne jo do misre diye haiN vo 'Sahir" Ludhianvi kii nazm "Mujhe sochne do" se haiN.



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 Post subject: Re: lafzoN kii takraar vaale she'r likhiye
PostPosted: Fri Jan 31, 2014 7:41 pm 
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balvinder wrote:
Dignity wrote:
ندگی تلخ سہی ، زہر سہی، سم ہی سہی
درد و آزار سہی، جبر سہی، غم ہی سہی
zindagi talkh sahi, zehr sahi, sim he sahi
dard o aazaar sahi, jabr sahi, ghum sahi

lafz sim hai ya sam, ya sum hai pata nahi : (


ye lafz "sam" hai jis ka matlab bhii zahr hii hotaa hai...lekin mujhe lagtaa hai yahaaN lafz "sam" nahiiN balki "sitam" honaa chaahiye..kuoN ki zahr ka istemaal pahle hii ho chukaa hai to shaair phir se "sam" ka istemaal kyoN karegaa aur vo bhii "Sahir" jaisa shaair...aap ne jo do misre diye haiN vo 'Sahir" Ludhianvi kii nazm "Mujhe sochne do" se haiN.

mere khayaal se lafz "samm" he ho ga... lafz "sitam" bandhne se wazn durust nahi beth raha... pehle "zehr" istemal kerna aur phir "samm" ko, mere khayal se nuqs nahi hai, kabhi kabhi is tarah se baandhna husn bhi barrhata hai... jese ager hum "samm" ko "zehr" meiN badal daiN tou dekheN misra kitna dilkash maena de ga...

zaindagi talkh sahi, zehr sahi, zehr he sahi...

ye zehr per zor dena kitni khoobsoorti paida ker raha hai... ye zehr per zor dene wali baat meri apni raaye hai werna kisi k paas Sahir sahab ka nuskha ho tou usi se tasdeeq ho sakti hai...
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